What u all have bn waiting for, post your comments on the stories direction andits writers, whos got it from whos got mess in there heads.

@lexlimitless, @godfather and @profound, three people that been holding it down in that thread. @Skillachi is holding his own as well. Buffy pushes the emotional side of the story which is needed to balance the action provided by practically every body else. @lexlimitles is a pretty balanced writer he steps in both all the categories the story has displayed so far... All the post contribute to the stories develpment tho. each and every single one of them are appreciated.

yeah yo, Godfathers the man, u can see his attitude in his writing (cocky bastard) he makes the scenes exciting for real. i was looking forward 2 more from caesar tho, personally i think the fight scene he wrote wasnt bad at all, donno why him stop... or maybe i do, right Godfather

Yeah i do, ADD bastard, buffy need to post more, lex writing is also nice and profounds ideas are creative, write more stuff skillachi, reach into ur ginormous head and do greater.

Thing is though, you guys need to write properly. Sentence structure... grammar... spelling. Skill and myself are probably the only persons who consistently write dialogue properly... and not jumbled.

Someone needs to add to that story... I dont want to dominate with posts- as long as it isn't MallocX and his devil worship.

yes, mallocs devil worship. cant say i was fond of it at all. i was seriously gonna give up writing this story. i mean what the hell. some bullshit i wont even repeat

Why isn't Gunslinger the so called writer adding to the story... wah gwan????

Why isn't Gunslinger the so called writer adding to the story... wah gwan????
lol i didnt say i was a professional lol i just started writing my first story lol.....dont worry i will in due time... in due time :D

Yeah i do, ADD bastard, buffy need to post more, lex writing is also nice and profounds ideas are creative, write more stuff skillachi, reach into ur ginormous head and do greater.

What do you mean by post more? As in my posts should be longer than the are? I write to a point where ppl can continue and add their stories but i'm just getting confused, the story is taking 50 different directions

The story is dynamic buffy. Whenever you are posting it is all about your ideas and perspectives. The dynamism makes it interesting because we all have a personal script and when you post the next person just has to work with it somehow.

Post more means that it has been three or four days since the last post and we need some fresh material. Just make it somehow link but make it you. Again, no devil worship.

YEP... have to stress the devil worship... yeah buffy buffy shes our girl... shes the only girl posting in this thread. what happen 2 di captain of Danwashitsu?? or some other females? u see we didnt have the girls perspective in our stories cuz none of us were female and buffy was in her not knowing what to do state. So how u all liking the story now? i just would love if ppl would post more and stop deleting posts

yer point taken.. and it occured once in the story and it hasnt' happened again.. so um move on eh.. stop lagging on the bad memory..

I just had to add this.... warchief gets the award for putting the story in its biggest twist to date. LOL
every other day i reread the first page just to see when he says stomp them chieftain

oh yeh and profound gets the award for redirecting the story after warchief's spate of madness.

cheesman... jah know i dont even know wat to say about you
"nortel, nortel" roflol my God that post was wierd, not even profound could fix it.

Godfather, i would write more to the story but im quite busy most of the times with school and such, but i add when i have the time.

YAY profound said i have good dialogue w000t

wooo, is it jus me or is it people havent been adding as frequently to add your story like they use to, hell if i could post twice in one go i would but yuh nuh, dont want to crowd it.

is tru dem fraid... di story a get 2 complex dem imagination cant fathom it... weaklings.. just prove me wrong...post

but please dont post fudgery

I want to post... but since is basically... 4 people posting, i dont see the point. I want somebody else post now... After that i will join back in the action

hey juss chill man... the story must go on. and like Godfather said he dont want double post, i dont wah post cuz i posted before Godfather, so dat leave u, profound, buffy or anyone else who wanna post. Buffy has her excuse doa... cyaa fight it. but yo post.POST.SOMEONE PLZ POST, what i wanna know is: how much people are waiting 2 see what happens next? give us ur views

hey juss chill man... the story must go on. and like Godfather said he dont want double post, i dont wah post cuz i posted before Godfather, so dat leave u, profound, buffy or anyone else who wanna post. Buffy has her excuse doa... cyaa fight it. but yo post.POST.SOMEONE PLZ POST, what i wanna know is: how much people are waiting 2 see what happens next? give us ur views

Yeah please post as far as i can see its another fighting scenes I DON'T DO FIGHTING SCENES so when u ppl finish there then i'll post. What happened to profound and skillachi?

i get my internet back by tomorrow so.. yer i'll be back bitches

hey juss chill man... the story must go on. and like Godfather said he dont want double post, i dont wah post cuz i posted before Godfather, so dat leave u, profound, buffy or anyone else who wanna post. Buffy has her excuse doa... cyaa fight it. but yo post.POST.SOMEONE PLZ POST, what i wanna know is: how much people are waiting 2 see what happens next? give us ur views

no one wants to take a guess....? or say... anything? great, so now that DK is back he can come post again. prolly talk about another game this time, like scrabble... since he already used twister... hehe

PS. i crack myself up..... gomensai

Godfather needs to keep true to the beginning of the story. Before you post read what happened up to that point. Jon was formerly known as 2010. He received a name when he beat Jensen. So no, not cool. And that man was an elite warrior who was basically born into the clan since he killed his parents when he was very very young. People need to keep true to the integrity of the story thus far then you add your twisted present or past.

look from when mi change dat boss, i jus didnt remember.

on a real i dubb ya'll the kings of literature and imaginative pieces

i think add your story deserves a sticky.. dont u?? :D:D

I think so too, even if someone may not post in it for a period it is a good story and should remain where all can see, putting some glue on it now

Lex, Godfather, Buffy and Skill- I am turning up the heat. Can you handle it?

i printed the story [ well blindz did it for me] i'm gonna catch up and get back in the game.. prepare for my coming foos :D

Lex, Godfather, Buffy and Skill- I am turning up the heat. Can you handle it?

Baby as long as its not fighting, we need more to the story than just fight so it wud be best if we focus on the characters and build them up again then we can consider the fighting, u know show them some other action

printed the whole story so far, reading it now to catch up
its damn good, hopefully I'll b able to add something with more meaning in it :D

printed the whole story so far, reading it now to catch up
its damn good, hopefully I'll b able to add something with more meaning in it :D


Lets hope so too. It would be good to get most members involved in the sstory

Hmmm. I guess I have to agree. The thing pretty much had an unfinished section with that girl who captured him in the first place.

Go ahead- tone it done some.

Lex, Godfather, Buffy and Skill- I am turning up the heat. Can you handle it?

Psh there is nothing i cant handle... i just need a computer and a internet connection

People, consistency and use of english. Yah. Nah point nuh finga- but interesting link fada.

@ Godfather: :clap :2tup :t_up :kakashi tell u man caa gp top that one wonderful i'm leaving this one to lex

i believe Godfather is coming into his true potential. awaken legendary writers of AS, arise and write, the best story ever created!

DATTEBAYO!!!!!!!!!!! :kakashi

I wonder if we could get it published now that wud be mad

bless up:D

Just some background info:
According 2 Wikipedia:
Hohenheim is also the shorten form of Theophrastus Bombastus von Hohenheim known as Paracelsus
Paracelsus (November 11 or December 17, 1493 - September 24, 1541) was a famous alchemist, physician, astrologer, and general occultist.

so i guess dats how i coined the phrase hohenheim 2 be a kind of ranking. also got di name from full metal achemist and decided 2 look it up. so when i seh hohenheim i speaking of a man wid a high level of influence and power in an area

Just some background info:
According 2 Wikipedia:
Hohenheim is also the shorten form of Theophrastus Bombastus von Hohenheim known as Paracelsus
Paracelsus (November 11 or December 17, 1493 - September 24, 1541) was a famous alchemist, physician, astrologer, and general occultist.

so i guess dats how i coined the phrase hohenheim 2 be a kind of ranking. also got di name from full metal achemist and decided 2 look it up. so when i seh hohenheim i speaking of a man wid a high level of influence and power in an area


Ok was i missing something here? What are you talking bout?

he speaks of hohenhiem of light from fullmetal alchemsit. guess hes' showing the link to actuall realworld alchemist.. nice one limitless


but why here. did you make an alchemy addon to the story i still haven't caught all the way up :o

yes i have. thats why i explained as well. i said background info yall, incase yall are wondering really who a Hohenheim is in the story and fullmetal

Well i still don't understand, going to read the rest of the story and see

Oh now i understand, and as usual Lex really good story. Where is profound? We need him now

hmmm buffy, just a question, in my post i made Arakamah, patriarch of fire, muhani's father who died, how is it you made hohenheim call her daughter?

there is always some girl leaning forward and smiling..??? what is she tryin to do show her boobs.. "i'm not mad tho i'm all for boobs"

what on earth are u talking about dude?

hmmm buffy, just a question, in my post i made Arakamah, patriarch of fire, muhani's father who died, how is it you made hohenheim call her daughter?

oh that long story PM me about that

So.... who goin restart the story... my mind kinda blank after being away from it for a while, somebody creative pick it up and make it wicked and ill help nuh

oh oh btw props to the person that wrote the fight with the teleporting guy. i found that fight hella entertaining.

We back up now... so whos gonna add to the story now?

oh oh btw props to the person that wrote the fight with the teleporting guy. i found that fight hella entertaining.

PERSON S!!!!!!!!1!11!!!eleven!!!!!!!!

How dare you say only 1 person... it was a bunch of us... :chair

gomenasai.. your so right probs to ere body that participated in the story if is even a one liner [ as long as it counted to the development of the story and wasn't something like pause movie this shit is tight replay ]

We back up now... so whos gonna add to the story now?


Its your turn now, i think godfather kinda confused so you clear it up for him.

Godfather is alrite. di yute versatile so him will manage, easily

The story has been revived. You know, going to higher heights. As usual you should be dynamic but you know we long past the surface level stage still. No one person's agenda just build your story and take it easy. Everybody loves a good fight scene but plot development is important.

Yah. And Buffy, which dude mek Muhani cry and had to pay for it wid dem life?? Me nuh memba dat.

Yah. And Buffy, which dude mek Muhani cry and had to pay for it wid dem life?? Me nuh memba dat.

Flashback sweetheart, flashback. That was in the past, you guys can put that in if you want to.

Really good post Profound, i think lex of godfather should have a go, i'll just watch for now.

lolz, nah not my time yet...

lolz, nah not my time yet...


What you mean by its not your time? It was me then profound so its between you and godfather, unless the other member want to pitch in.

there are others, there is stewy and death_knight

there are others, there is stewy and death_knight


talking about Stewy a LONG LONG time mi nuh see nothing from him. Whats up with you dude?

Im so lost in the story it isnt even funny. I'm waiting for somebody to redirect me then ill get back ... but im here

Ok Skillachi, so who is going to write next

Er Buffy thanks for the compliment. However, the next writer will reveal him/herself. Let the story simmer a little. People have to backtrack and reread to get back on target.

So hold on, the story stuck or something?

yes, the story is gettn deeper which in turn means more thought process is required and worst yet some of us has lost our flow...temporarily

yes, the story is gettn deeper which in turn means more thought process is required and worst yet some of us has lost our flow...temporarily

yeah i know exactly what you are talking about, i'm feeling a bit lazy now

yer i sorta expected that i'm really sorry the forums went down for the time it did. really really really sorry :(

yer i sorta expected that i'm really sorry the forums went down for the time it did. really really really sorry :(


Yeah we understand babes, a nuh everything you can control.

yow lokat is either u add to the story or u dont add shit in that thread ino. is weh di **** do yu?

Somebody need to delete that post.

checking and rectifying. we need to make some rules for that story.. or had you aleady done that senor profound

This thread was made for idle posts like the one thelokat made. The story was only for the story and its contributors.

This thread was made for idle posts like the one thelokat made. The story was only for the story and its contributors.

i know and the situation was addressed. check your pm's

yep, sry ppls ^_^', didn't see this topic...serious tho...why Jon?

i dont know i didnt name. him. whats wrong with jon tho. the bigger heads in this story would definatly be. @lex, @profound, @godfather, @skillachi, @buffy, i'm a small fry for it

Jon was pretty much random. Bigger question is why Mhuani? I couldn't ever figure out that one. I am guessing people wanted her to sound mid-eastern.

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Finally a real post. Trouble is the Himalayas is in India, not Africa. Africa's biggest mountain is Kilamanjaro I think. Himalayas with Mt. Everest, yah.- India.

I admit it wasn't quite what I was thinking but it certainly is original and we will just have to work with it. Thanks Godfather, but fix that minor technical detail.

actually, i got the name Johnathon Riley from my imaginary day dreams. i created him years back, its a nice name i always wanted to have. most of the story or at least the parts i wrote come from this imaginary dream.... im not weird, im not weird, IM NOT WEIRD!!!

Um, well. See what happens when you do coke. yah. Quit the habit.

Anyways Lex, what you think of where things are? Rdy to add something?

Oh, ppl noticed how much pron is in the story? It was all from Lex's imaginary day dreams (redundancy- just imagination or day dreams).

Um, well. See what happens when you do coke. yah. Quit the habit.

Anyways Lex, what you think of where things are? Rdy to add something?

Oh, ppl noticed how much pron is in the story? It was all from Lex's imaginary day dreams (redundancy- just imagination or day dreams).

on a real jon is not short of "meow" at all.. lol.. story definately not short of sex scene's and the scene's pretty decent too.. i'm telling you i actually print the thread and read it on my way to and from work.. :D

why Mhuani? A friend of mine has that name. i just love it :)

Buffy, DK, Lex, Skillachi- I am calling you out. Do a ting nuh? Me hungry.

sigh. i donno folks. hmm let me try dusting off my drawing board now

Profound i'm right below you so nuh call mi name, i have to so some serious brainstorming before i can post my story.

incidentally, maanui a hindu tribe were the first to discover extra-sensory perception

incidentally, maanui a hindu tribe were the first to discover extra-sensory perception

talk about coincidence :D

Buffy, DK, Lex, Skillachi- I am calling you out. Do a ting nuh? Me hungry.

Ok as some... or im guessing all of the contributers in this thread knows, i have been away because of... events that took place in my life. As i slowly regain my bearings i can promise i will add to this story before the week ends... maybe even before this day ends.

I changed up the story a bit, to kind of show an end, light at the end of the tunnel for the Purity saga. i hope everyone steps up to the challenge of actually filling all the unanswered question or filling all the open spaces i left, most important being the rest of the purity saga

BOMBAAT STAR!!! A WAH SOH!! Geez, talk about gone far. Four years ahead. Interesting development.

I am not aware of what happened to you Skillachi but I certainly hope you are pulling through okay. Hang in there man- and you don't need to post until you are ready.

yeah for real skill, take as long as u need man, no sweat

Two posts in one day? It must be Christmas already. Buff can't seh NUTTEN!!

COol post. So the choice is continue four years ahead or act on the present. Hmmm. If buffy don't post soon I will.

Lol calm down profound.

And for the record my dad died thats y i have been offline so much.

Yay profound thinks my post is cool :bounce

or death knight. rise to di occasion man, u been dormant for a while, see u have a ball park of thing u can write now

yer dog i coming out of retirement dont worry.. i got some things floating around in ma immagination right now.. soon straiten it out and let the ink flow on paper

:bow :clap Ooo the story MAD!! :clap2 good job guys :kakashi . Profound i'm going to add mine later so nuh bodda think bout posting.

*walks in and hears the crickets chirping*
*looks around at the empty seats*

So nobody wants to add anymore to this story... i feel like make another post now

thats how i feel now skill trust me. but i wanna see where u ppl can take this new twist first

Buffy said I should hold my horses- so I am waiting on her.

Ill hold your horses for you... the threads been empty for soo long now

Sorry Buffy. I couldn't wait any longer. It was time to add. Let us see where Buffy or Godfather take it.

Ok... nice addition Profound... except im kinda confused, are you sure you read my post correctly before you posted?
How did he (Jon) end up back in the cave beside Gabriel? Gabriel was walking through the cave and Jon was forced to walk around the mountain becuz he could no longer walk through the cave...

yeah i mentioned that oversight to profound, didnt get a reply, really concerned. i like it, but u need 2 add to the beginning or something, DONT DELETE IT

Ok... somebody else added to the story... Hear wah
Profound can you edit your post so that Jon isnt a part of that fight (i dont want to end the creativity here... but for the story...). You can just make it Gabriel vs the two guys

Omega-X says he is cool with fixing his part of the story... so its just you prof :D

Okay. Hear what. I am going to make an adjustment where Jon is near the other side of the mountain and Gabriel already reached and is bidding him forward.

I was under the impression that Jon took an alternate cave path as opposed to the direct empathy path. Interesting addition Omega.

EDIT:

He is now walking around outside. He is meeting up with Gabriel in a cave. They are not inside the cave, probably about ten feet from the cave and the fight bruk out.
@Lexlimitless, remember those two dudes we spoke about? These are they.
@Omega- not too much editing needed. You gave Otaku flight room so he can take it all in.
@Next poster- remember that Gabriel is immensely powerful. He doesn't need to use Heaven's Cry to dispatch two fools.

Yayyy for profound!
Everybody makes a mistake... i did once too and was corrected by lex. Yay i can understand the story now

pretty decent addition omega. can we add a 7th member to this writing group? we will see, keep it consistent first. yeah i feel the vibe everyone, i feel it, dont make any addition predictable, just like bleach manga u have no idea what can happen next

I hope Omega doesn't change his post at all. The story is about Jon and we see everything with and through Jon. Gabriel is powerful but is a supporting character. Almost everybody is expendable in my opinion.

BTW, I don't think I made a very big mistake that was beyond comprehension. Just location, location location.

Aight I won't change the post at all, hehe good I hate editing my own work XD
Yup you can add me I think I am a Half accomplished author. I've written nine books already should try and publish one though hmmm.
Anyway be warned I am never never and I mean NEVER without a idea so I could actually just take the entire thing now and write it all out. So we need to establish do I wait for like two post before adding and such cause otherwise I could get carried away and add every other post.
I like the Soul concept though reminds me of my first book. Had a character named Damario was a vampire that drank more than just blood muhahaha.
Also Riley is the best name in the world!!!!!!!

I like the concept and I think it is going good but dude it has more plot holes than Jamaica has pot holes lol.
Not complaining it is still awesome.
So yup I'm in all the way. Sorry that post wasn't as good as it should be seeing as I made it at bloody 3am O_O took me that long to read the entire thing and catch up. (started at around 11:30pm)
Also I agree that we need to show more of the character I love character development one of my strong suits so let's try to work that in then? After this battle though.
:D I'm bringing the poetic discriptions now.

Do not post every other. If you look at the trend you see that we have a group of writers post and then we come around to you. So, in your case, don't post until I post- as a rule of thumb. We need to hear from Godfather, Skillachi and Buffy and me before you.

Buffy- your time. Can you handle it?

Discuss the plot holes here Omega. Wha you a talk about. May have a filler post to clear them up.

The STORY GONE CRAZY!!! Mad piece a post deh. I don't know who will be able to take it on from where Lex left it. Probably the Godfather- it is his turn anyway.


EDIT: Lex, you went to prep school. Go through ande edit your grammar.

which grammer error dat?? mek mi go check but yeah, @omega, discuss the plot holes here i wanna know, well the fact is i already know the holes, if we didnt have holes the story wouldnt have diverse directions 2 take. and we would kill a good plot. and my opinion is post as u are led but dont hog the story, there is a great chance one of the writers has a better idea for the direction than u do, so give everyone a chance 2 keep up and see if they want 2 add. i would say give it 12hrs the least

i umm, edited my thing, fixed the errors. i added some more stuff 2 it as well, some parts werent connecting, like if otaku threw unaz into the wall why didnt we see him get up and dust himself off. little things like those i fixed

Oh I like this new post. Though the falling 100ft and breaking up was a bit much but still very good.

Lets not get me wrong here I wasn't saying I'd take over or really post every other post. I was merely trying to show my bountiful entusiasim.
Yah plot holes, well I can't think of them all at the moment and some are just so far back it makes no sense to mention now.
But it is rather funny how close Jon got to that girl Pete "made" in just a week, seeing as the flashback to when he met her in the club suggested such. But anyway the one I'm thinking of now is this bit with Mohuni (spelling?)
Now it was mentioned that he gave her the scroll when he became the new master yet she played dead and vanished for who-knows-how-many-odd-years when Jensen was still alive mind you. So that is just a little confusing. I was going to re-read to make sure I wasn't mistaken, but.. ah well so what should we do about this hole?

did u draw that pic in ur sig yo? if thats a yes maybe u should do some of that for the story every once in a while, we put it in select parts of the story, sure would be cool.....

Yeah. that part ur talking about... big mix up... everyone needs 2 look at that and try 2 iron it out. especially Godfather

did u draw that pic in ur sig yo? if thats a yes maybe u should do some of that for the story every once in a while, we put it in select parts of the story, sure would be cool.....

Yeah. that part ur talking about... big mix up... everyone needs 2 look at that and try 2 iron it out. especially Godfather

marvelous idea lex would sorta be like that manga thing we discussed way back at the starting of the story :D

Oy, ease up before anyone gets excitied. I didn't draw it, I can't draw so let it be known.
I would have happily done it though but sure you must know someone who can draw because that is a great idea.
Assuming you are thinking what I think you are thinking.

do u know anyone who can draw omega? everyone ask around, we need a animesynergy artist!

OMG, i can't believe this i'm way behind, work did have me differently, so i'm going to read and see what i can do, heard that the writer mad, well it seems as if you guys might not have any use for me soon :( , anyways going to see what i can do.

Now now not so fast we need all our writters and more wouldn't hurt. There is a little of all of us inside Jon, he won't be the same minus one person. Well not much of me in him yet....
Anyhow I acttually do know a couple artist but I can probably cut some out now cause wel the best of the bunch I know she is kinds funny with her drawing. She doens't think she could just draw from her head, she'd need to draw from something, which is why most of her drawings are of warcraft.
Thinking now there are two, one I'm helping do a web comic and another I shall see what I can do.

Ok back to that little gap I think I have a bit of an idea on filling it out. So grab your pro-patch ladies and gentlemen.
Ok looking at it I realized that there are deeper holes inside this big hole.
So now according to one poster she never believed Jon did what he did which would have been to take her father's ashes but Jensen had proof. However we have her being a eye witness even false dieing at the scene. So just change that monologue to her saying she wouldn't have believed it if she hadn't seen it.
Now I love the currnet idea of her playing dead there but we'll have to keep this event close to Jensen's death we don't want her having too much time to mull over it.
Now Jon can't give her the scroll till after he becomes the new master because that's when he learns of his true potential. However it was said that Jensen had told him it was important that he know what was on the scroll and for what it may be used. Ok so having identified those here is my propersition.

It is coming to the close of Jon's training, Jensen wants to push him towards his full potential but he also want to have Muhoni out of the picture, so before Jensen sends him out on that mission we will have him tell Jon of the scroll and Muhoni being the only one Jon loves and truts he immediately shares it with her. Jensen learns of this and figures it is going a bit too far and sends him on the mission. That part goes as it does now bam bam heart break, death the works.
May have to change the dialog a bit when she is talking to him when he is chained seeing as she mentions Otaku and speaks as though she'd know him for a while.

Now I'm not too sure if all I just typed there is even necessary but seeing as you guys seem to have big plans in the backs of your heads for this I figured this could be something to bare in mind.
Thank you and goodnight.

The holes can stay. Really. Different people add different twists. Duly noted though in case we made it a book.

EDIT:

MAAAD MAAAD MAAAD!!! I really like where Godfather took it. I mean, who would have thought we would have been able to rope in the real Chieftian to do the stomping. And he even included the actual stomping.
Whoever is going to do the fight with Gabriel better be damn good. Gabriel is kinda like a heavenly warrior angel type robed in flesh, so he really shouldn't need to use anything to dispatch a little idiot like Janus. My opinion still. Too soon for me and omega to post though. Skillachi or Buffy or someone else. But, not Godfather, Lexlimitless, Omega or me. (Though I would be the next closest.)

for all who havent noticed i edited my post a bit to inlcude some good ol soul sucking.

yeah count on godfather to never let me or the story down. someone else come on step up to the plate and swing away!

Where is the buffy? Skillachi. Is there no one else? (says Brad Pitt aka Achilles)

Is it my turn? ... i thought it was buff's turn... if u guys want me to i will add

yeah yeah yeah. three cheers for the skill-achi... HIP HIP...BONZAI!!!!!

yeah yeah yeah. three cheers for the skill-achi... HIP HIP...BONZAI!!!!!

Bonzai? Um, okay dude.

Take a deep breath Skillachi. Lets make this one count (no pressure).

*takes deep breath*
Ok now its time to fulfill my dream of making Gabriel the coolest character evar...
*cracks nuckles*

OMG you ppl reach far man, i have some catching up to do so if anyone wants to post b4 me then go ahead.

Good job guys, i must say that i am very proud of you. So what happens next? Nice post Skill, who is next? I don't think i can handle these areas, unless u guys want me to do commercials :D.

*Bites fingernails nervously waiting on comments*

Please dont let me suck

Btw on the sword in the last part... i didnt want to make a good soul go to waste

Good work Skill!! Keeping it real. Effortless dispatch of that little punk Janus. Who's turn next? Hmmm.

He kinda feels like a good version of Aizen though... But it is all good.

EDIT:

I think it is my turn. Nobody post till I post (except Buffy because it is her turn too).

:bounce :bounce

Yayyy somebody liked my post!

I posted. Lets see wah gwan.

well thats me. i think someone was asking why him call himself Johnathon Denravi... theres ur answer. i dont think i did a great job, i had other things on my mind

As always you did a good job Lex

jah know star it a get bad now, nuh boddy nah add? weh omega deh? weh Godfather deh? bring di big chat come nuh omega and mek we see a next post....

jah know star it a get bad now, nuh boddy nah add? weh omega deh? weh Godfather deh? bring di big chat come nuh omega and mek we see a next post....


Yes yes yes everything he said. Come ppl unno going mek mi post and spoil the story?

Whoa there man watch how you use that "big chat" phrase, making it sound like I was boasting somewhere along the line *cough* lol
Anyway I aplologize for taking so long, it would have been up a long time ago but I sorta lost a internet connection long story. Anyway If thi ain't too good sorry, also if there be any errors then blame it on laziness then inform me and I shall correct. Thank hope you like this one I did.
Allso I think you should take up the chance to post now Buffy, he's unconcious so there are alont of was in which you can throw in an input.

Hmmm,

Interesting post. Kinda took it far away from where I was thinking. I mean, yeah, I know it is a dynamic story and all- but for once I truly don't know where it is going. I thought i was forcing a fight between Gabby and Jon but it seems that the battle has been either cancelled or postponed. I like this twist though, it makes sense.
I think next up is Godfather. Buffy, well, yeah.

i think i like this twist. depends on who takes a swing at it i should see a nice continuation either way

I am going to post now...

I figuredd that was where it was headed, and I guess it is destined since now reading the last pot we have Otaku and Gabriel facing off.
Well someone had better pick this one up got a very nice catastrophic battle on our hands.

Godfather- where are you? I am calling you out. I think Godfather is an 'epic battle' specialist. I don't know why we fight so much though- I promise we can do some girly downtime after this is done. Time to develop a soap opera life I guess, for the girls dem. Do any girls actually read the story?

no one said this would have 2 be the only story in existence... if uno wah soap opera den uno can create a soap opera story. this story is juss dat tuff dat any semblance of soap opera wont last long. plus mi nuh like how profound a under-rate di man dem. do like it one bit. wah u mean bout Godfather is a epic battle specialist? u a downclass urself and skill and omega and even me, whats really good? yow stop say crap like dat or u goin actually have people start believeing that trash and dont post because dem feel dem not a "epic battle specialist". listen man we will lose writers and our avid readers unless u give everybody a chance 2 develop their potential

SKILLACHI FOR EPIC BATTLE SPECIALIST!!!!

no but really... i thought i was good at it...

ok so since it isnt mine turn ill sit back and wait a while

no no still. skill if u want to post... POST, i think is ur turn now, if its not my turn, profounds turn or omegas turn.. that leave u, Godfather and buffy. so go right ahead dude, just drag this fight out, let as much people sink their fangs into it as possible but dont make it any less epic. make this the part of the story everyone is waiting on, live up 2 everyones expectations. good luck everyone

I can't write fight scenes, have pity on me please come on :( I really don't know what to write. I'm unable to count the amount of times i've tried writing.

the seed i sowed has grown fairly well and i haven't read one word of it. that psych class did me well, unu probably don't even no wat i talking about but i do and that's all that matters

I have posted at last, profound you kinda went a bit too soon but whatever, you put me in the epic battle so its all good, hope it entertains.

My aplogies for calling Godfather out and giving him such a high commendation. I think he is an excellent writer.

However, everyone adds a different flavour to this story. I like to set up battles but I can't actually do the fights, Lex and Godfather do good fights, Skillachi always has a way of turning things around. Just when you thought you had it locked here comes Skillachi stirring things up- which is a good thing.

Skillachi, strut your stuff.

Buffy, not to worry, your time is coming soon. After this struggle.

And Greed- this isn't your idea. As a matter of fact, you started a lame thing and you were not even thinking of making a persistent story.

say word!!!

Right now i choose you, GO SKILLACHI!! come on man make me proud on this one

Ok made my bide for battle specialist.
So um yeah what do I bring to the story?
Well then again this is my tird pot so maybe one would be unable to tell....

u know what.... everyone here knows im a str8 forward guy, skill, Godfather and profound know first hand that if their posts arent making the cut ill tell dem str8 up. I am no judge of a mans expertise and i dont really know u..... so i wont say anything.

however fix ur grammar

u too lex
i got a little confused in ur post.

Well i added my story, its not much but i was tired of sitting and waiting, hope you guys understand it.

Ok i fixed my story, my editor finally came back. :D

*knock knock*
Want me to post?

It is MY turn. I am approaching.

My apologies just trying to not let a good thing die. Also wondering what was going on cause its been a long time

Well. It has been posted. Feel free to comment. Now that the epic battle seems over people need to be more creative. Post some comments. Jon's future is going to be more interesting now.
Oh, and I partially quoted Isiah 6:2.

Good post, but damn, i wish i was able to close it off i had a decent idea, oh well, have to get creative again. and also, someone need to elaborate on buffy's post, cause thats like, i really dont know whats happening there.

I am not sure either. I think she is rallying up some ppl to go meet Jon. But I don't think she knows that Gabriel is gone. I was thinking of leaving a piece for someone else, but the battle has been around the block. Besides, lexlimitless already told us what to expect 4-years down the line.

Talking about that where is Lex? He shoud post he would know exactly what to do.

He would be flattered to hear you say that.

Um, what is going on. Where is everybody? Nobody can recover from the vanquishing of Otaku? If it is that big of a deal people should let me know.

i have been gone for so long and i still see the story where i last remember it??? i had to do something

So what happened to the story? This one finish or something? Well if thats the case wud shud start another one soon.

when it done i gonna printit and read it from start to finish. i'm sorta lost in it to behonest

It doesnt have to be done. Instead people need to find their creative centre and post.

Lex is planning up another story though.

It doesnt have to be done. Instead people need to find their creative centre and post.

Lex is planning up another story though.

I just remembered that there wasd another part you that Lex did, when he was married with kids and stuff and something happened. I guess we can pick up from there. He is? I wonder how him never tell me.

Sorry Buffy. please forgive me? Somebody post nuh, was my post bad?

Sorry Buffy. please forgive me? Somebody post nuh, was my post bad?

No it wasn't its just really hard to post after you, unless you going to tell me what to post.

For those who haven't noticed the other story is up and running so feel free to post.

so what happen no more story?? me not as creative a writer still so me can't really touch it

story dead from the day i subverted ppl into starting it

oh zn...such a pity

ppl need 2 bring this back to life...

Yeah i mean, i haven't been here in ages and i expected to see you guys in the middle of a story, but to mu utter horror nothing

story resurrected...where the other writers at?

I tried a ting........Don't expect it to be interesting tho. I will keep adding as I can. Will be absent from internet for a few days this week. Will not be able to see or do anything till about Friday. Hope someone adds to it. It was great till I started to post..........

I See that the story is up and running, hope it continues this way

i need to take it all put it in a word file and prin tit all i need to catch up i'm back at the big fight that happened between the teleporting guy and jon/otaku

i need to take it all put it in a word file and prin tit all i need to catch up i'm back at the big fight that happened between the teleporting guy and jon/otaku

Mercy a so far back yuh deh?

Well, I've read it all through before posting........would like someone to continue it as I don't have as much time. When I do, I'll post. I like how it goes, and how everyone has to pick up from where the next leaves off. And the story still flows lol. Could someone please write some more? Waiting to hear the ideas of others.

Seeing that people are either busy or have lost interest, I will take it upon myself to keep the story somewhat alive. Bi-Monthly, I hope to add even one line to the story. Hope it doesn't bore you, if anyone still reads it that is.

wait this would help me out...can someone write like a review of all that has been going on in the story to date? it would help me as i try to go through it and maybe help some other ppl as well

Review or summary?

Review or summary?

review....intro to the characters and thing.

oh shit the story hard yknow. never got as far as to know otaku left john n possesed david.. when u get my note book i will make attemps

hmmmm. i just goin say a few things. tripple posting is not cool. it defeats the point of the thread. its not called add your story Khat, its add your story for eveyone to give of their talents. i wont mince words, i wont say i appreciate the effort. i will get to the point. u say u read the whole story yet you are making some vast inconsistencies. there is no way to correct the direction you are taking by posting after you, tho, that is not the reason why i havent posted. this site if child-safe, it cant handle my style of writing.

hmmmm. i just goin say a few things. tripple posting is not cool. it defeats the point of the thread. its not called add your story Khat, its add your story for eveyone to give of their talents. i wont mince words, i wont say i appreciate the effort. i will get to the point. u say u read the whole story yet you are making some vast inconsistencies. there is no way to correct the direction you are taking by posting after you, tho, that is not the reason why i havent posted. this site if child-safe, it cant handle my style of writing.

It's called add your story for everyone, but no-body else seemed to be adding anything. Yes I triple posted, but it's there like that for those to see that it's been a good and decent period of time between my posts, and it's not like I'm trying to hog the limelight. I don't like the fact that I've been putting so much into it, and I've seen your contributions and I've loved the story up to the point that I started writing in it. Where were you when we were begging for it to be updated? If you check the date-stamps you'll notice that my posts are about a month or two apart. There was no activity by anyone.

Please tell me where my inconsistencies are, I'll edit and correct them.

"Correct?" I thought the essence was to pick up the story and add your own to it? There is and was no original plot to it before. The story had major changes in the initial stages, and I've (tried) kept the names and themes the same throughout. If you'd like me to change whatever or delete my posts thus far, I have no problem doing so - provided you're going to do some posting.

The site is child safe, and it means you can't keep saying and doing certain things. If you're going to be rude, use some of your intellect when doing so and be smart with your words - suggestive.

As for the rest - where are the story writers? I never liked the fact that I posted into the story, but it has been months. Would someone please revive the story and disregard my posts?

PeAcE.

hmph...a man want a man drop the story whilst no one else contributing..:eusa_snoo not cool

i dont want anyone to drop anything. i already made my point and i was only born once, so i dont repeat myself. all who wish to misunderstand..... why did i even say anything.... sigh... anyway the story has taken root, u have a world of freedom in writing, the story has developed thus far with the writers achieving a kind of common mind. if u wish to write u can, if u wish to tripple post, you can. but be mindful of some facts.... it has been.... 4 years since otaku was cast out.... it was not stated that david was the same age as jons children.. who are .....4 yrs old. and some other things here and there. dont get personal, cuz i dont care if u do... do something i actually care about, read thru the story and develop the common mind. i want you to shine khat... like a luminous object shines because light is cast on it, shine with the light given to you from the previous writers... no one sees a light far out in darkness.....

just toa add i caan put a disclaimer in thread title 18 or older to read contains mature content etc

i dont want anyone to drop anything. i already made my point and i was only born once, so i dont repeat myself. all who wish to misunderstand..... why did i even say anything.... sigh... anyway the story has taken root, u have a world of freedom in writing, the story has developed thus far with the writers achieving a kind of common mind. if u wish to write u can, if u wish to tripple post, you can. but be mindful of some facts.... it has been.... 4 years since otaku was cast out.... it was not stated that david was the same age as jons children.. who are .....4 yrs old. and some other things here and there. dont get personal, cuz i dont care if u do... do something i actually care about, read thru the story and develop the common mind. i want you to shine khat... like a luminous object shines because light is cast on it, shine with the light given to you from the previous writers... no one sees a light far out in darkness.....

The story was taking a path towards ending. All I did was revive it as best I could. I saw one thing that seemed like a continuity error with the son and tried to fix it also. Let me shine right out of the story thread permanently. End of story. I will read after you and others take it back up.

PeAcE.

Summary - Of Sorts

Otaku - Entity which posessed Jon
Honenheim - Holy men fighting against evil in secret.
Jon - Main Character. Formerly posessed by Otaku.
Muhani - Girl that is now in relationship with Jon.
Hellscream - Otaku's sword.
Heaven's Cry - Sword of the Honenheim of Light.

Otaku has posessed Jon since he was small. Whenever Otaku's mind takes over, Jon has no control over him. Muhani and Jon share a shadowed past which is revealed later on. The swords and their names are representative of the inner characteristics of the wielders. The story is kick@$$!!!

ppl like you i hate the most. quitters. those who cant take any correction in stride. those who get defensive and just give up one they take a flack. dude, do what u want, dont wanna write, dats ur dam business!

only grown ups deserve PeAcE

Had you given some direction I'd prolly have built on it - thus far I've heard nothing. Hate whatever you want - I could care less. Topic is the story. Do something constructive and use destructive criticism instead of just being destructive. As said by yourself, you could care less about misinterpretations - so if I misinterpret it's my bad luck and not yours. Personality wise, I dislike conflicts, and as far as I can see my attempt at placing something into a dying story was not appreciated or needed, and since I have only recieved reviews from you (obviously the only person that reads the story maybe?) and have seen nothing concerning the colorful ending - I presume that mine is unnecessary. As I said, I've enjoyed what I've seen in the story thus far, and never really liked the fact that I had to add anything to it. Seeing as what I added was not needed, I will wait till it is added to. Were you going to do something productive, you would have pointed out the continuity problems and I would either argue against it (tell how it fits) or correct the story accordingly. Till then, unlike you, I have nothing against you the person, but so far I can see the dictatorship personality and I've never liked the type. Thus far as it seems we share a common interest in anime and maybe some games - nothing else. Point some direction for the story and I'll edit and repost what I had, no direction = no posting. Have fun.

PeAcE.

PS - All my anime was/is in Kingston. Check with the user SLIQ for linking what is in my list seeing as the times I'm in Kingston are not convenient for anyone to meet. Take what you want from SLIQ - there probably will be no more "charge" than to provide the blanks. He doesn't have the space and storage and archiving problems that I do.

Lataz.

*edit*

To put back the garbage I had posted in the story or not? That is the question. As it's not going anywhere still, and I actually still do have the garbage that I had posted tucked away in a file.

"Awaiting Orders" - Qute from RED ALERT 2/YURI'S REVENGE


PeAcE.

put it back khat

ok, will do so.

PeAcE.

Thank you. i wont be posting yet though, Godfather is gonna give it a run.

kool, will wait for that.

PeAcE.

at long last, The Godfather has given it a run, im sure khat had stopped waiting a long time ago tho, lol, well i have also brought back this thread so you guys can speak your mind on what i have done thus far, i think its a good start a nice twist, if allowed id like to possibly right the second part to what i have started i have a good idea in mind and would like to present it. DO THE MANGA GUYS!!!

at long last, The Godfather has given it a run, im sure khat had stopped waiting a long time ago tho, lol, well i have also brought back this thread so you guys can speak your mind on what i have done thus far, i think its a good start a nice twist, if allowed id like to possibly right the second part to what i have started i have a good idea in mind and would like to present it. DO THE MANGA GUYS!!!


Trust me. I haven't stopped looking for artist to do this. I love the idea. as our community grows So will the aggregate talent. We'll have our own manga in now time. the new visitors ill sure get a :lam: from animesynergy

just read some of the bickering that was going in this thread, geez, relax guys, i based my post off of what khat posted so i hope its consistent cuz it has been a long time and the details are a bit sketchy for me.

Oh my the story still running well i shall have a look see.

I don't think it was inconsistent. Check it back and tell me. Adjustments can be made. Will read it over again soon.

PeAcE.

Last 2 additions were great. So the thing was in that guy before and he tansfered him self to the baby.. during sex. kinda cool.

oh the world "motion" usage was funny to me too.

nice work skill, you took the idea right out of my head about the samurai being Gale. also what DK is saying can be seen two ways, if the woman was already pregnant then yes, but if she isnt then the idea would be that otaku wanted to impregnate doris so he could have a fresh new body.

LOL i always wonder why unno cant just seh better sexual words in the story... there's nothing wrong with it... just raise the rating up to pg-13/16.

Godfather, i always wanted to put together a blindman fighting scene still, i think blind fighters are more intricate. I actually want to put another badman blindman way way down in the story line...

YOW.. lex addition tough out a this world.. especially where it stop

HOHENHIEM OF STRENGTH DROP FROM SKY SHOUTS STOP!!!!! AND TIME FREEZES

sell awffff

lol, thanks. its great being back again, just needed di dups Godfather to spark some inspiration in the whole thing, juss awaken like magatron. yo fa real tho di addition dem weh Godfather do juss put the thing back in pace, back in motion and skillachi not changing course.

i wonder what the next addition gonna be about, ting dun gone bad already, children nuh recognize daddy, daddy get tick outta dis world but cyaa draw him sword, the strength of the hohenheim of strength is finally revealed... whats the reason why the kids, wife and friend have not spoken to jon for 8 years, whats the deal with Jon, the good guy's, new rage?

questions questions, so many angles, which good writer will take up the torch next? profound? buffy? DK? Godfather again? Skill again? Khat? maybe there is someone with latent potential...

Well i always wait until some violence goin take place before i write still... i cant help it, i like violence and i like imagining violence so i consider fight scenes my forte. Profound needs to return and add to the story, he was good at that

Like a ship we ago sail again! Oh NO, good work lex, yea teh freeze time ting did bad still but geesh, the sh*t going to require some thought as to not make it sound cliche or lame, the story I mean, writers unite.

what the hell man could someone just... damnit!! the suspense is killing me, which next great writer will take the torch?

I like where are things are going. A lot of unexplored areas to capitalize in. I think I am going to try.

I think that while the battle scenes are always epic there needs to be a little more plot development and drama. I started the ball rolling in that direction. Of course a battle can pop up at any time but atleast there are more possible avenues to travel. Jon's journey, Muhani's Journey, more about the varied Hohenheim, more about the agency, flashback to what Otaku is really up to or has been up to. So much.

i added something, just throwing it out there, my aim at plot development. Otaku has a new friend... Inferno the elementalist. it didnt cover the entire 15 years but im leaving the rest of years open 2 any1 2 close the gap. i mean no 1 has 2 continue from where i left, can take a different angle 2

good posts good posts, who is next up? i agree with profound on the need for more drama, trust me I have been trying to come up with ways to add such elements to the story.